not bad.
Your voice was a little too soft for the rest of the song, but along with the piano, I think this is excellent for an experimental piece. The beat was nice and smooth; however, you could have added some nice variations to it to make it more interesting. Regardless of all that, I really liked this piece. I'd love to hear the final version-->PM me if you make it =D
-Vesta J
thank you very much for your nice comment
Ending needed a real ending. Beginning was good.
She made the worst decision of her life. At the time, she was unaware of his suffering. He said nothing. He didn't know who or what had caused his life to spin out of control. Slow realization comes to her, and regret falls heavily upon her. At
1:17, he vows to never forigve who screwed up his life. He never finds out, she never apologizes. Confusion and misunderstanding consume them both.
Somwhere toward the end of the song, where the violin stopped and the piano started again--it ended too abruptly, not realistic enough. Like a violin singing beautifully and getting choked off.
Progression was outstanding, and you managed to keep throughout the song the same key and rhythm, not stepping out of line, which is fitting for this song in particular.
-Vesta J
I rememeber when I did that part at the end of the climax. I was already running out of ideas by the time I hit that part. Just the climax alone took me a couple hours to figure out how to make everything work together without sounding to...overwhelming? So by that point, I was starting to get a little burned out, so I decided not to go ahead and try anything else crazy for fear of ruining the song. U are correct though. I probably could have added a few more measures to add some more flavor.
Honestly as far as the rhythm and key of the song go... I just don't know how to play outside of D, lol. I've been teaching myself how to play the keyboard, and I find D to be the easiest to work with. And I love how easy it is to play sad songs like this in it! It makes it easier to cover up how inexperienced I really am at this lol!
Thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the song!
-Jason
KTRECORDS
nice beat you got there, buddy
overall, i like the ambient feel to it, plus the little hooting in the back, before the bird calls. the bird calls were just a little too loud for the song, though. the song seemed a little disoriented at that part.
i like the relaxed thing you were going for, there. my fav part was from between 0:23 and 0:36
like i said, the beat was probably the best part of the song, other than how it ended. overall, it's pretty nice.
except for the bird calls from 0:38
..maybe just lower their volume, it makes it seem like they're more important than the rest of the song, unless that's what you were aiming for right there.
-Vesta J
Anyways this is just the demo so yea. Just wanted opinions on the general idea of the whole song. And now listening to it i agree the bird sounds were made for the bg not to interrupt the flow =/. I see where youre getting at thanks alot itll help. =D
hmm..
haha, i can see this as a slow build up of power, mainly because it repeats itself over and over.
Like nintechno said--good synths, and awesome kick.
Thing is, it doesn't seem to go anywhere. I couldn't feel a true build up; I felt like it was going to come, I'm waiting here patiently..but does it come? no.
o.o
i was hoping for something more dramatic, as the melody suggested. all i got was a repeated, but good, tune, over and over, but with a slightly varying beat.
I liked it when it quieted down, and then I began to think, "okay! here it comes.."
:/
Anyway, its a good melody overall. i just think you can do something with it. But I think fireman is right. I could see this in a flash :)
-Vesta J
hmm, wait untill 10:00 mountain time (my time) i dunno when that is in your time, and i will post my remix of this song.
thx for the review dud!
lol!
this was really cute to listen to as it progressed.
and no, i didn't freak out. this is actually a pretty cool piece! it was really amusing :D
i felt like i was in a video game and i was a royal thief (whatever that is o.o) escaping the castle because the king was gonna whoop my ass.
haha randomosity xD
i think the main reason why i found this comical/medievalish was the constant--but seemed to be off beat with the tune-- fast beat. (nice thing there with the math, btw)
oh yeah. like i was saying. it was mostly the instruments you used. and the fast, fleeing way it presented itself. and the hihats? i didn't really like how that introduced the rest of the song. but the main thing about this song was the beat. it made the rest of the song seem pathetic, like it was boasting, "Ha! I am better than thou! Kneel before me, o slow ones!"
Okay, end of personification of digital things..
but overall, i liked it. the tune is definitely something to be recognized. that's where you excelled.
(i don't get the title, tho..? maybe it's the imagery it conjures, that's all. because i can't really think of an imbalance of spheres. btw: please tell me if i have started making sense. No-- really.) and as for the genre? i guess this sounds a little techno. a lot of people mistake trance for techno, and this could also be just miscellaneous or something else. but that's not really important.
Lol cute? Surely not! It is epic. Like someone training for a pie eating contest or something. But the royal thief immage is also valid. And the title? Don't worry about it. I was writing the title and it just came to me and I was like, yes. Perfect. So if you don't get it, don't worry. You're on the same page that I am. On a more serious note, a better transition between sections would certainly be a good move. As for the genre, I didn't really know where to put it, and to be honest, I don't really know what trance is... anyways, thanks for reviewing.
a little repetitive, but in a good way.
but still sounds really beautiful!
the strings seemed a little late coming in at each measure (i think its just the tone tho)
the beat suits it well in terms of not being off, but i really like when it hits 1:41.
it can be used as a powerful background theme to a flash the evokes sympathy or to a character who's going over their last actions/reviewing what they've done.
pardon me if i don't make sense.
the part i really think was displaced was at :51 where the beat seemed a little bad ass
>:D
it just seemed really out of place, and much shallower to everything else. then again, it all depends on how you look at it, i guess.
i hit 3 but i meant to make it 4/5
:(
i hate when i do that..that's the 2nd time today!
i feel like this really doesn't belong anywhere near a 2.83.. STUPID BOMBERS...
..so when i clicked 3 it only went to 2.87 -.-
this is a great piece, tho! i'm glad i came upon this :)
-vesta :"D
Thanks :)
-Very descriptive review as well. Yeah, just an older piece, but I thought it was worth a shot here.
-Thank you again, I'm glad you even came across this :)
-ImperfectDisciple
lmfao! kudos! :D
lol, same here. i'd really love to see someone despise this.
VERY EPIC, indeed.
. . .
I LOVE THE STORY THAT GOES WITH THIS.
awesomeness! XD
i've listened to a couple of your songs, but this title caught my eye.
Machine Of Judgement.
.......
dun dunn DUNNN!!!! xD
poor flash file!! it's life..
it was so short...
*minute of silence*
mwahahahaha!!
>:D
this will forever stay in my head. ..the story, i mean.
the song won't have to stay in my head, as i wouldn't care for it to, seeing as how i am going to download this and listen to it whenever i feel epicness coming on :D
YEAHH!! xD
-vesta ":D
Well it wouldn't be TOO hard to find somebody who didn't like it. It's all a matter of taste after all ;D!
Glad you liked the story, I tried to make P-Bot look a bit more evil then it might be, still it made for good imagery so I made him as evil as they come.
Machine of Judgment does indeed sound epic. Probably misleading to listeners who arn't aware of Newgrounds and who P-Bot is, but then again this song was more FOR the audience at Newgrounds so yeah ;D!
I hope the epicness entertains you for many hours yet :D! Thanks for the review, i'm glad you liked it!
ehh
the kick is too loud.
the tune isn't bad.
the voice is a little too far away. i feel like a frustrated fan at the back of a concert hall. which is bad.
that's all technically speaking.
non-tech, all i can say is that i'm not one for reviewing rap lyrics, half because i can't hear them that well, plus i don't write much rap.
i see that this is a demo so i'm not going to judge you on that, but there is a place for submitting demos on here, i think..
farno1: in my opinion, about 87% of modern rap is total crap, anyway. i don't think this actually deserves a 4 whether i like it or not.
-Vesta J
lol this was just for fun. More of a comedy piece then an actual production.
very nice!
the intro was nice, but a bit long. my favorite part was when the voice was getting ready to finish and the beat starting kicking in. the music under the voice also suited it very well.
i think the whole piece was done very well. [the ending scared me a little bit..?]
you maintained the same smoothness throughout the song, even at the end. it made it seem like rough seas
5/5
-vesta :"D
thanks:)
aww
this sounds very gentle and soft, adding a nice, warm feel to everything :)
and when i say everything, i mean my house T.T
haha :D
i really like this. (the title suits it, too) the tunes stay in the same key generally, and this is just amazing!
and you know what i think? i think that if this was download 10 TIMES, people should give a reason why they did. like, maybe leaving a review of how great this is..? :D
really nice work, am going to download this myself.
-vesta ":D
5/5
thankyou ^_^
"the tunes stay in the same key generally"
Yeah thats kind of what i aim for :P At 0:30 it does have a couple of not too beautiful notes in there. But its pretty much improvised so, it happens ^_^
thanks for reviewing :)
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