failure to conform.. :| *gets deep in thought*..xD
the structure of the song was overall brilliant, except MAJOR issues here.
i was about to give you a 5, but then i realized that would be wrong, since i'm overlooking a couple things here.
the title caught my eye, since those kinds do.
the tunes weren't bad at all, but the problem is,
A LOT OF IT WASN'T IN HARMONY.
some parts were downright out of tune, that's how i heard it. what i think you need to work on is making sure that every note that plays doesn't violently conflict with any others by another instrument.
BUT, a lot of times this is what happens: the notes don't hurt each other (lol..as if they're alive XD) ..but the tunes being played by 2 or more instruments ..just... really don't go along with each other that well.
for example, the piano wasn't bad, the progression of the song was pretty okay (you mentioned it evolving--and that part was probably where you excelled compared to all other parts) , rhythm of some of your instruments was well in tact with the beat (which was way TOO loud and..sharp--like staccato..), but put it all together, and what.
it ain't as pretty as you thought.
:/
so i think that's where you need to work on the most.
the instruments of the beat being too sharp and loud, the conflict with the melody.
i'm impressed that the song still maintained its confidence throughout--i listened to the whole song twice. so overall, it wasn't awful, but needs work.
you can PM me if you change it later on so i can tell you what i think.
of course, that's entirely up to you, since half my reviews are unresponded, anyway. but i'm giving you some critique that i think may be useful.
keep working on it :D